1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：

    Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)

    Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)

    2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：

    1) Weak: The team members are good players.

    Revision: The team members play well.

    2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.

    Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.

    3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：

    1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

    Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

    2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

    Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

　 　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：

    1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

    Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.

    2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.

    Better: She compares prices and quality.

　 　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：

    1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.

    Better: Charity has supported the organization.

    2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

    Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

　 　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：

    1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

    Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.

    2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

    Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

    3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

    Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

    4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

    Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

　 　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：

    1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

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